The first chapter

So I'm an aspiring writer and I've been working on idea's and the actual writing of an Avatar The Last Airbender fan fiction..... and i think it's coming along great but i need readers and idea's. I'm open to anything really and this is kinda important to me so i would really love it if anyone decides to read my work and help me along.... this is my first blog so it's not that great but i try :D........... this is the link to my books first chapter

http://www.booksie.com/fan_fiction/novel/ssj5goku5/avatar:-the-legend-of-keyx-book-1:-earth